The eyes are captivating, and overall I like the photo.(posted 8603 days ago)There are some things which I think reduce its effectiveness as a fashion/commercial headshot, though (if this were a casual shot of a friend, I wouldn't bring this stuff up, but since you've often talked about your goals in fashion, I think it's relevant).
The strong, specular reflections in the top of her hair don't fit this style--save the hairlight for senior portraits or maybe glamour (if you use it at all).
The cropping doesn't work for me, either. I don't see how slightly cropping the top and one side of her hair benefits the overall composition; it doesn't focus my attention on another part of the image.
The glossy lips don't work with this expression. I like her lips, and I like the soft smile, but the specular reflections make it harder to distinguish between her lips and her teeth.
The hair styling is also a bit off. It's not neat and well-controlled enough to have a slick, polished look (that would match the rest of the image).