Edward, don't mistake spirited, opinionated and direct criticism with shit disturbing childish taunting. You've received both in this thread.(posted 8793 days ago)This is a fairly simple image to critique. Now you're getting apologies and/or flaming from an old pro flamer.
Simplify your set and consider continuity of mood, light quality, light quantity and background/ props. Polaroid is an excellant learning tool but expensive. 4x5 is an excellent but expensive format (especially in polaroid) Barebulb lighting is difficult to use in portraiture. Expect harsh criticism when you use harsh light, lots of folks think portraits require soft light. Some people also think you need to shoot hundreds of frames to get anything worthwhile.
And be careful what you ask for ("Rip me apart!"), you might get it. Don't go away mad... t